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Re: Sirrus Join Post

Post by Goku on 6/29/2012, 11:05 am

Your character seems nearly Goku. His name is one letter off. His back story seems to describe Goku's nature a bit as well. I recommend changing this up.

Your roleplay sample needs a bit of work itself. It's a laundry list, the spacing is off. You need to start new paragraphs each time someone speaks.


No light, no light in your bright blue eyes
I never knew daylight could be so violent
A revelation in the light of day
You can't choose what stays and what fades away


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Join date : 2011-12-10
Age : 30
Location : New York

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Level: 81
Race: Saiyan
Location: Other World

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Post by TheEpicSuperSaiyan on 6/29/2012, 2:13 pm

I know this, it's just always the character i use... I suppose i could change it up once in a while. ^.^

about the roleplay, i had to copy and paste many different posts because it was in multitple posts, but ill fix that.

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