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Kigon Claim #1

Post by Kigon on 7/21/2012, 12:05 am

Thread Name: Relic Hunt /w Great Namekian Encounters
Type: Quest
Link: http://www.infinitedbz.com/t1670-relic-hunt-w-great-namekian-encounters-quest-complete
Link to Character Sheet: http://infinitedbz.wetpaint.com/page/Kigon
Participants: Kigon
Word Count: 1,813
Quest Rewards: 1,000 zeni and +10 Villain Points
Hero or Villain Points: +10 more VP
Benefits: N/A

Thread Name: Cave Encounters
Type: Solo
Link: http://www.infinitedbz.com/t1676-cave-encounters-solo-complete
Link to Character Sheet: http://infinitedbz.wetpaint.com/page/Kigon
Participants: Kigon
Word Count: 1,019
Quest Rewards: N/A
Hero or Villain Points: 10 VP
Benefits: N/A
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Re: Kigon Claim #1

Post by Goku on 7/21/2012, 3:53 pm

Your RPs do not meet expectations. Let me give you some general tips so next time you can get a full reward for your writing. If you follow these simple suggestion, I guarantee you'll meet.

First off, you need to space out your paragraphs and make things a bit more organized. I'm thinking this was a copy-paste job from a word processor or something, but you should check to make sure it's legible before submitting it. Right now it just looks like a wall of text.

Second, you're writing in present tense. It makes for awkward reading. I highly suggest you write in the past tense, as it is much simpler to follow, and better for RP situations.

Also, you don't need to write any of your dialogue in caps lock. Most of the time a single exclamation point will suffice. However, I find it best it to tag your dialogue with "he shouted."

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+211 XP, +1,500 zeni, +2 Action Points, and +20 Villain Points.

Congratulations!

You've gained one level (2.)

You currently have 200 AP and 25 TP to utilize.


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Re: Kigon Claim #1

Post by Kigon on 7/21/2012, 6:48 pm

OK, thanks for the tip.
AP Distribution:
+25 Strength
+50 Agility
+75 Ki
+50 Endurance
TP Distribution:
Sense - 25 TP
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Re: Kigon Claim #1

Post by Goku on 7/21/2012, 10:34 pm

This has been completed.

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