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Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Khaos on 3/20/2012, 5:59 pm

Character Name: Jeraph "Khaos" Kaious

Age:210

Gender: Male

Race: Hybrid

Hybrids Only - Primary and Secondary Race: Primary Shin, secondary Demon

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Starting Location: Earth

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Strength:100
Agility:75
Ki:100
Endurance:125

Ki Blade

Were you referred to this site, if so, who referred you? Alberdyne

Profile is Jeraph.

[b]Background (150 words:)

Jeraph, was once a mortal warrior of unknown decent, due to his constant training, and wandering looking for a duel worthy of him, he was lead to fight several of the toughest combatants on earth. While he toiled for more combat knowledge the Kai's finally appeared to him and explained his birth right to him, that he was a guardian, destined to watch over a planet, and that his powers were far above those of a normal mortal. Although much to the Kai's disdain there was a hatred in Jeraph's heart spawning from the other side of his blood. This is the side that shows in his appearance and allows others to see him for what he is, he is a half demon, and it shows. In battle the anger always showed, and even as the Kai's explained to him his destiny, the anger was welling inside.


Roleplay Sample :

Eternal darkness, nothing can be seen, all one can hear is cheers, and boos of an unseen audience. A lone movement of a body can be heard above all else.

What the hell, where am I? Why won't my eyes open." Khaos wonder's outloud.

Suddenly we get a flashback of an intense battle on some unknown planet, we see Jeraph fighting against several beings known as Saiba men, using his Ki Blade he slices through several before 3 grab him and self destruct, sending him here. The realization hits him like a ton of bricks as he remembers the battle, and his own demise. Finally his eyes open but blink and we catch a glimpse of Other World. No not the hell depicted in religions world wide, but very similar.

"Those little bastards, it took 6 of them to get me but they did. Geez, that's what happens when I try to protect Namek from Frieza? For some reason I didn't think I could die." Khaos, Jeraph's demon side says with hatred and anger filling his voice, absently talking to himself.

Khaos sits quietly looking over his bleak surroundings. Concentrating to take in everything he can, he notices the sounds of a battle. It almost sounds like a tournament though because one can barely make out an announcer. Jeraph making it to his feet finally, begins to migrate towards the sounds. It is now he walks into a huge expansive cave where we see a tournament style ring. In the ring is a green Namekian, and some human looking fighter. It's not long before the Namekian fighter wins.

"The winner of this bought and the Other World tournament is Pikon" the announcer screams excitedly

The crowd errupts into cheers, as Jeraph looks on mildly amused. He continues walking looking for a way to sign up for the tournament, when *poof* he appears on an unknown planet to him. He notices several Namekians and Humans standing there celebrating, as the Great Dragon vanishes into the night, the Dragon balls used to summon it finally stripped of their power.

"I wonder where I'm at" Jeraph thinks to himself.

"Hey wait, he wasn't one of the ones that died on Namek was he?" A woman with green hair says as she points at Jeraph.

The woman is asking a little bald man this question. They both look at the half demon with a mix of fear and awe. Finally Jeraph decides to speak.

"To answer your question yes I was, actually I died at the hands of Frieza's minions." Jeraph replies the anger swelling inside, and can be heard in his voice.

"Then how come we didn't see you fighting?" The bald man says to Jeraph.

"You probably missed me? Don't know how long I've actually been dead." replies Jeraph with sarcasm dripping from his words.


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Re: Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Goku on 3/20/2012, 6:14 pm

Doesn't look too bad. Your dialogue should be in story format, not script format. For example instead of

Jer: I wonder where I'm at now.

???: Hey wait, he wasn't one of the ones that died on Namek was he?

You should write:

"I wonder where I'm at now," Jer said.

"Hey wait, he wasn't one of the ones that died on Name, was he?" the unknown voice said.

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Re: Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Khaos on 3/20/2012, 6:45 pm

Thanks for the heads up, I'll be working on things the more i post.
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Re: Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Goku on 3/20/2012, 6:53 pm

Also, so far we don't have a site timeline up (we will probably soon.)

The events of DBZ never happened. Planet Vegeta was never destroyed and King Cold runs the PTO (as Frieza is a playable character.) The events of Dragonball did happen however.

So hopefully you can use this to fix up your back story a bit.
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Re: Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Goku on 3/21/2012, 2:25 pm

You can't have Dabura as your picture bro. He's a playable character.

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Re: Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Khaos on 3/22/2012, 3:57 am

Edits made as requested
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Re: Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Goku on 3/22/2012, 2:40 pm

You have to sign up and provide your wiki username so that you can edit your character sheet in the future.

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Re: Custom character Khaos Setsune

Post by Khaos on 3/23/2012, 2:02 am

i believe i signed up as Jeraph on that wiki link, if not i can create a new one..
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